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Band 5

Most people pay taxes to contribute to the development of their country, however, some think they have other responsibilities rather than paying taxes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In most
of
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the
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countries, the
government
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 operates with revenue collected through
the tax
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taxes
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. A few
people
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 believe that they are only obliged to remit the
taxes
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.
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, others opine that they must
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 in other social reforming activities to support their society. In my opinion, obeying the rules and regulations of the
country
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 is as important as paying
taxes
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. On the one hand, except
the
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 oil-rich countries, most of the other countries run their
government
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 with revenue generated through
taxes
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. All
government
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 policies, projects, subsidies, and schemes are funded by the money raised through
tax
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taxes
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. Even the salary of
government
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 servants is paid using these funds.
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,
it is clear that
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 every citizen of a
country
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 must pay
taxes
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.
On the other hand
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,
In
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in
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 a
country
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, there are certain rules and regulations that every citizen must abide
.
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 If
people
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 are arrogant and fail to obey the laws, it is difficult to maintain peace and
tranquility
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 in the
country
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.
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, it results in economic depression and may lead the
country
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 to civil war.
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, the Syrian
government
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 had enough revenue from oil reserves, but
people
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 had an aggressive attitude
to
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 other
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country
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country'
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 dwellers.
People
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 failed to follow the legal system
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and
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lead
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 to civil war.
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, the economy
depressed
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is depressed
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 and
people
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 are forced to move out of the
country
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 for asylum.
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,
people
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 can offer voluntary services in the underdeveloped regions of the
country
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.
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, educational workshops and health camps can be
organized
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organised
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 in the remote
location
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locations
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 of the
country
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 through which they can support the
government
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.
Better
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 education and health care system is the tool to eradicate poverty.
To conclude
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, every citizen of the
country
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 is obliged to pay
taxes
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.
However
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, abiding
the
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by the
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 rules and regulations of the
country
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 is as important as paying
taxes
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.

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task achievement
Try to include more specific examples to support your arguments in each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to link your ideas clearly to help the reader follow your points better.
task achievement
Expand on the introduction to give a clearer overview of both views before stating your opinion.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion stated in your essay, which helps the reader understand your stance.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay shows a logical structure with distinct paragraphs for each viewpoint.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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