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Should we spend our time leisure time with family or on job

#time #leisure #job
In today’s helter-skelter world every individual is seeking for
leisure
time
 in their lives. While it is possible to claim that we should spend our
leisure
time
 on
job
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the job
,
however
 my aspect is that spending
leisure
time
 with family will produce happiness in life.In
this
 essay
,
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,
 I will elucidate my point of view by analysing both sides of
this
 argument. There are multifarious reasons behind my perspective. The most
perpondant
 one is that spending
leisure
time
 with family will gives opportunity to share
experinces
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experiences
experience
 and increase bonding between family members. As an illustration sharing
daily experince
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daily experiences
daily experience
the daily experience
daily experienced
 with family member will create social bonding and enhance
there
of them or themselves
their
 knowledge.
Therefore it
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Therefore, it
 can be rightly claimed that giving
leisure
time
to
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with
famliy
a social unit living together
family
 will lead to stress free life.
On the
contrary there
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contrary, there
 are a handful of people who
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believed
believes
 that contributing
leisure
time
 on
job
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the job
a job
 is more valuable due to various reasons.
First
 of
all that
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all, that
leisure
time
 on
job
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a job
the job
 can be
use
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used
 for making extra money.
For instance
persone
a human being
person
personnel
personal
 work for overtime will have better spend power in
comparision
the act of examining resemblances
comparison
 with someone
.
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.
Hence
 it can be
aggreed
united by being of the same opinion
agreed
agree
 that giving
leisure
time
 on
job
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the job
 can
also
 bring
better life
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a better life
. To recapitulate, it can
inferred
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infer
 that merits of spending
leisure
time
 with family is
outwieghs
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outweighing
outweighs
 the benefit of spending
leisure
time
 on
job
 in
long run
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the long run
.
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