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In some countries men and women are having children at later age than in the past. What are reasons for this development? Do advantages of this development outweigh disadvantages?

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To Become parent is a personal choice.In earlier days people were pressurized to do kids immediately after marriage in some countries, but nowadays couple
welcome
Suggestion
welcomes
 a new member in their life after so many years of marriage and other early
.
Accept space
.
This
 essay will
further
 discuss the reason
also
 whether it is good or bad.
Individual
Suggestion
The individual
An individual
are getting
Suggestion
is getting
 aware
about what is marriage
Suggestion
about what marriage is
. It is not a signal of becoming parents
instead
 of that it is promise
to spend
Suggestion
spending
 whole life with each other.
In addition
 to that
both
Suggestion
Both
 the men and women wants to know the likes and dislikes of their partner to make sure relationship
last
 for long periods and their child
devloped
being changed over time so as to be e.g. stronger or more complete or more useful
developed
 in the good environment.
However
, the chances to
concieve
have the idea for
conceive
 after certain age become difficult and expensive
Firstly
, it is considered 24 to 28 age ideal for getting pregnant as after 30 it is almost impossible to have a young one
.
Accept space
.
Secondly
, IVF is a technique developed by the scientist to help the couple to have a child in their family, but
this
 technique is not affordable by all people. Overall, when to
do
engage in
make
 a child totally depends on person
,
Accept space
,
but I believe it should be done within the 30years of ages as it is considered to be ideal. Doing after it can be a very painful and expensive process
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