3]. Describe an experience you had as a member of a team - What it was? - Who were the members of the team? - What role did you play in this team? - And explain how you achieved your goal?

- I am working as a site coordinator at Tepperman’s,
basically
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a retail company and my department
called
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the e-commerce department. - There are 4 people in our group my supervisor Mario, manager Isabel, director Kelly and myself. - I
am
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burning the candle
from
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both ends to develop my career in
this
field since I got hired.
However
, I got the chance to prove myself as an extraordinary person,
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months ago. - We
had
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opened our new store in Ancaster, Ontario, Aug 2019. To promote
this
store on our website we
had
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been given a project called “Ancaster store”. - Our e-commerce team was very dedicated to
this
project as we were only 4 people who
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the user experience of the website. - My job in the project was
about
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to create a website banner with promotions
of
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for
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the store and discounts given at
a
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time of opening. - Isabel, the manager gave me a deadline of 1 month to create promotional prices for the furniture, electronics, and mattresses. - I
also
had to manage a contest called “enter to win Ancaster”. The draw was for 5K in Tepperman’s gift card so people were crazy for the contests,
therefore
, I got so many entries, more than 8000. I have updated their information
such
as names, emails, contact numbers, and cities, in the spreadsheet for the day of a draw just in a week. - I
also
had to create static pages with all the information of
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and rules &
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regulation
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.
- Time
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given to me was very limited,
therefore
, I didn’t take any
break
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and
also
worked overtime to get everything done before the deadline. - Everyone, in my company, was very happy with my work as it has increased the number of customers and sales as well. - I was so proud of myself because I had to fulfil
this
goal to be successful in my career as it was my first job and the first task as well. - From
this
task, I have
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lots of self-confidence and faith in
my own self
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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