The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph gives a picture of how
the
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birth
and
death
changed in New Zealand from 1901 to 2101.
Overall
,
while
the
rate
of
death
illustrated a steady increase, the
birth
rate
had a
fluctuated
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fluctuating
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trend over an interval of eleven years. As can be seen from the chart that the
number of
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apply
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death
rate
was approximately 10000s
in
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at
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the beginning of the period and had more than
double
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doubled
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that
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in 1961. Until 2001, the data on the
rate
of
death
continued increasing progressively, reaching just about 30000s.
Then
the
rate
went up dramatically in the period from 2021 to 2061 but after that, it
leveled
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levelled
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off at around 60000s and dropped slightly in 2101.
On the contrary
, the
birth
rate
was much higher than the
death
rate
, it started below
20000s
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the 20000s
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and reached a peak of more than 60000 in 1961. But the
rate
of
birth
fell steadily in 1981 whose number showed 50000s. Since
then
, the number of
birth
has varied between 65000 and 50000 and in 2001, there was a slight rise
nearly
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of nearly
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55000.
However
, the trend is expected to decline to over 40000 by the end of the century.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, death, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.

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