Learning depends not upon the personality or the methodology of teacher, but rather on student's attitude on his or her own learning. Do you agree with this statement?

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Most people argue that gaining

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relies on the

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and not on the pedagogue’s nature or the way of teaching. In my opinion, I think it depends equally on both the instructor and the pupil because if either one

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two does not perform their duties properly

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grasping

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gets affected. We cannot deny that in every phase of education, teachers play an important role in implanting

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students

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. Instructors who are qualified and have influential

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can teach better and encourage more

students

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to gain an education effectively.

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a professor who is not punctual and never has any interactive sessions in classrooms will attract

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students

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towards the lecture than professors. Another consideration is the

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approach towards learning. Almost all the teachers put great

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to educate

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their

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, but

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, if the

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is not willing to study and work harder

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no matter how good the instructor is the

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will not be able to gain

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. In conclusion, I believe strongly believe that acquiring education has two parts.

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having a good teacher with an effective teaching style and persuasive nature.

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towards getting

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task response

The essay does not fully address the prompt, the discussion around the pedagogue's nature and teaching method is not clearly presented. More detailed explanation and relevant examples of both perspectives are needed.

coherence cohesion

The essay demonstrates good progression and connection of ideas, with coherent and organized paragraphing. However, there is room for improvement in using linking words and phrases to improve cohesion.

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Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

200 words

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Fully explain your ideas

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