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You should spend about 40 minutes on this question. Some people believe that sport is an essential part of school life for children, while others feel it should be purely optional. Discuss these opposing views and give your own opinion. You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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People have differing views about whether or not
sport
 is
an
Suggestion
a
 vital role of
school
 life. While I accept that there are great benefits of
sport
, I would believe that
sport
 had better a optional
subject
 at
school
. On the side of
argument
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the argument
 there are people who believe that
sport
 is a vital role of
school
 life. They state that the benefits of
sport
brings
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bring
 up helping
student
Suggestion
students
the student
 to develop their physical strength.
Furmother
Suggestion
Further
, the
sport
 gives them a hand to
dowshift
stressfull
extremely irritating to the nerves
stressful
. Without playing
sport
 and doing exercises, the student could not be concentrate their attention about
lessions
a unit of instruction
lessons
lesions
lotions
 and feel more tired.
However
, as far as I concerned, the
sport
 should be a
noncomponsory
subject
 at
school
. There are many reasons leading me to believe
this
 problem.
Fristly
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Firstly
, each
sport
 is suitable for each person about their physical and ability.
Secondly
,
instead
 of the time of playing
sport
Suggestion
sports
, they could spend on academic
subject
 and prepare for the vital exams
such
 as graduation
exammination
the act of examining something closely (as for mistakes)
examination
examinations
,
exam transition
Suggestion
the exam transition
. In conclusion, I believe that
sport
 should be
noncompulsory
 for
school
 children, because
sport
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the sport
 is not suitable for all children and had better to study
academic
Suggestion
academic subjects
an academic subject
subject
 to pass the exams is more
the the
definite article
the
 benefits of
sport
.

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