In some area of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion on this?

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In some parts of the

world it

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world, it

is not considered safe for people to move freely especially at nights.

This

is particularly evident in some regions in the US, where youngsters are not allowed in public spaces without the supervision and companionship of adults.

Although

the idea of certain merits, in my

opinion it

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opinion, it

is absolutely wrong to lock down teenagers as

this

does not solve the causes of the issue and creates

further

problems for youngsters.

First

and foremost, insuring the safety of those for those the law was created to protect is not made by

such

harsh, measures but rather by

insuring

make certain of

ensuring

safety measures in the streets.

just

Suggestion

Just

like giving a patient

painkillers

Suggestion

painkiller

to alleviate the situation

instead

of treating the illness, these

measure

Suggestion

measures

should

also

tackle the real problem. As

such

, policy makers should take the necessary arrangements to insure the safety of teenagers and adults alike, who will be equally reluctant to leave a closed-doors environment.

Additionally

although

such

measures might be effective over the short-term, in the long run they might

cause harm more

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cause more harm

than the good intended. As

such

, I believe that

such

procedures cannot be sustainable for the future and better solutions should be attained.

Additionally

, and at

this

age, teenagers should be offered a lot of opportunities in order to experiment, interact with their surroundings, and simply grow. Given their rebellious nature, adolescents will almost certainly not abide by

such

measures and try to find ways to abuse

this

law.

For instance

, during

this

period in life the majority of individuals have tried certain activities that might have devastating impacts on their life,

such

as smoking and drinking, with absence of supervision there is a high probability that dangerous outcomes might arise. All in all, I believe that confining teenagers to indoors will almost certainly do more harm than good because it not only inhibits the natural process of learning but

also

does not address the real roots of the problem.

Wed Mar 11 2020

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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4 paragraphs

329 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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In some area of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion on this?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In the future all cars, buses, and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

With the rise in popularity of the internet, newspaper will soon become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Housing shortage in big cities can cause severe social consequences. Some people think only government action can solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, young people are not only richer, but also Sephora and healthier than even before however, they are less happy. What do you think are the causes of this? What solution do you suggest?