The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

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The chart illustrates

water

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percentage used in six regions of the world for various objectives

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as Industrial, Agricultural and Domestic.

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, in Africa, Central

Asia

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, South East

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and South

America

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water

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consumption is more for Agricultural uses,

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North

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in North

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America

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and Europe

water

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utilized

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for Industrial uses. The lowest percentage

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for Domestic. Looking at the information more specifically in South

America

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percentage of

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utilized for Agricultural was 71%,

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North

America

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and Europe utilized 39% and 53% respectively for Agricultural.

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However

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the

usage

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water

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for Domestic

uses

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was less than 20% in all

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apply

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three countries.

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, the

usage

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water

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for Industrial

uses

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was more in North

America

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and Europe with 48% and 53% respectively

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South

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in South

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America

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it is only 10%.

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, the

water

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utilization in Africa, Central and South East

Asia

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for Agricultural more than

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two objectives, 84%, 88% 81% respectively.

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less than 10% of

water

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is put to use for Domestic use

also

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the

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water

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in Africa, Central

Asia

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and South East

Asia

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for industrial use was less than 15%, 7%, 5%,

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and 12

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% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, asia, america, usage with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

190 words

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irrigation
domestic
industrial
regional disparity
economic structure
sustainable management
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population density
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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

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