The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950s and 2004/5

The graph below shows the number of passenger railway journeys made in Great Britain between 1950s and 2004/5
The line graph compares the amount of passenger railway journeys made in the UK over a period of 55 years. It is noticeable that the popularity of means of transport increased by the end of the period. In 1950,
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rail network and London Underground systems fluctuated significantly. In
first
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decade the
amount
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of people who used a National rail network reached a peak,
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London Underground was falling from approximately 740
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to about 735
sum
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. Both systems exceeded the billion passenger journey mark, with the two decades
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the most noticeable witnessing soars. The light railway and metro systems did not have significantly changed than the other two networks
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but rose from approximately 0.1
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to about 0.8 total by the end of the period. The most stunning aspect is that the journey numbers for the National
railway
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Railway
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Network fit into those in the London Underground, in one word I can say that it was
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more practical essay I have ever done before. To be honest
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copied all the words
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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