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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to the closing of all shops in town and cities. Do you agree or disagree

#growth #shops #town #cities
Nowadays, online chain becomes a most popular, entertaining and rapid method in every country so that it makes problem for local business. In my opinion, I agreed because it has more opportunities to select items which do I need to buy in one place with lots of collection. The
first
 point, do shopping is a kind of relaxing and enjoy between younger and elder peoples.
Therefore
, they would like to borrow things in the shop rather than purchase in online. From my knowledge, it is a wasting time for human which have more responsibility and doing a job.
As a result
 of that they are willing to have an online outlet, compare to walking into a boutique.
For instance
, I used to work more than fifty hours per week,
then
 I do not have a time to go to a market. On account of that fact, I used to do online shopping.
Additionally
, there are so many internet purchasing apps are available
such
 as Amazon, Wish, E bay and Ali Express.
However
,
This
 system makes essay for consumers by buying different items in one place.
Furthermore
, those apps introduce some cheap deals and discount for items alternative a department store.
Further
, It has helped to select items in appropriate atmosphere and it helps to save money and time for clients.
In addition
 to that it is really effecting to a department store in towns and cities closing as lose their customers. In conclusion, considering all those facts the I agreed online shopping will be virus for all shops in towns and cities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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