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Some people think that you can never become fluent in a language unless you have spent time living or working in that country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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One's linguistic mastery is no one-dimensional matter. While accustoming oneself to a
language
 is widely regarded as pivotal, debates arise whether prospecting multi-linguists should go to as extreme
of
Suggestion
to
 lengths as visiting the
language
's origins to achieve true fluency. In spite of its indisputable advantages, I am against the notion of resorting to
such
 measures as a fixed prerequisite.
To begin
 with, statements acknowledging the merits of residing in a country on an individual's linguistic proficiency are indeed indisputable. In an environment which inhibits one to use their native
language
, said individuals have no choice but to exclusively utilize the
language
 relevant in the country consistently. Many researches confirmed prolonged exercise of a skill done consistently enough leads to substantial improvement of said skill - and
this
 includes linguistic proficiency.
However
, other simpler means of acclimatization
also
 exist. With the rapid availability of the Internet to the greater mass, being up to date with the world's affairs has never been easier. Local news and entertainment media (e.g., movies and songs) made in foreign languages have
also
 been entertainment media to the global audience - an opportunity countless polyglot has taken advantage of. While the utilization of
such
 media has varying degree of success, it is unarguably cheaper and
subsequently
 more accessible to individuals other than the elites and elitists.
In other words
, utilizing and familiarizing oneself to a
language
 consistently via the omni-accessible Internet can serve as a cheaper and equal alternative to
prolongedly
 residing in said
language
's home country.
Nevertheless
, dismissing either as being invalid means of improving one's fluency would be detrimentally unwise.
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