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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss both views, and give your own opinion.

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Environmental protection is the responsibility of the government, others
also
 suggest everyone is responsible. We can have a brief description on both the views and I could suggest my personal opinion as well.
Firstly
, we can discuss about the issues on the nature and as a human being, we polluted the earth heavily within a century. As revolution in the industrial development occurred a century ago, we started emitting the CO2 and industries
such
 as automobile, steel plant, oil & gas industries are the major contributors of the pollution.
On the other hand
, vehicles
such
 as bus, motorcycle and heavy trucks are
also
 having their share in emitting the CO2.
Secondly
, each individual should be conscious and should have their own contribution to save the nature. Awareness among the people and the government started a couple of decades ago, they have taken various steps to reduce the emission, which affect the globe.
For example
, in the Europe, they have plans
to
Suggestion
To
 change the mode of transport to use the railway as a major replacement, which could considerably reduce the pollution.
Likewise
, another part of the world has taken steps, to bring down the effect. Population in a less count suggest that, it is the country's leadership, who should implement and monitor the emission. They have a valuable reason, as far as the industry concern, contribution from the heavy industries are in majority. I think, it is acceptable and individual have nothing to do with the reduction activities.
For example
, in the China, manufacturing plants are enormously developed and common people have no data on the development, because it happens at the cost of environmental effects.
Finally
, in my opinion, the government's contribution is widely appreciated and to support them, everyone should act as a volunteer and be a part of the nature saver.
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