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Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#protection #responsibility #politicians #individuals
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Some people are convinced that only politicians are responsible for the
nature
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 protection, as every single person's efforts are miserable.
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, people themselves can't contribute a lot
in
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of
 the environmental
problems reducing
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problems, reducing
,
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 why national
nature
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 saving programs provided by officials are the only way to deal with.
Personally I
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Personally, I
 support
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 point, as I am totally sure that only by the officially driven promotion could the environment be protected. As I have been living in the region, where heavy industry is concentrated, every single day I can literally see the influence of environmental
pollution
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 almost everywhere: in the air, in the water and on the ground. In my city exist a variety of
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nature protecting
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nature, protecting
 organisations, that were created by volunteers. They provide different activities against environmental
pollution
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 on the regular basis, but despite that fact, I currently don't see any positive results. Any research provided by the air quality control laboratory, have found even one evidence of
pollution
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 level reduction connected with above mentioned organisation's actions. Yet another result of
research
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the research
 was shown by the same laboratories when our government had provided special promotion for the companies, that showed a willing to take on an additional responsibility of
pollution
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 level reduction.
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 because shareholders of companies had recognised how they could benefit from the cooperation with officials and
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 they made some investigations in a special environmental friendly equipment
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 as filters. In conclusion, though people may vary in their opinions, I support the point that politicians should carry the responsibility for
nature
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 protection, as any other ways of influence can't affect on big companies so far.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental protection
  • responsibility
  • politicians
  • individuals
  • large-scale
  • policies
  • regulations
  • impact
  • corporations
  • environmentally friendly practices
  • resources
  • expertise
  • collective efforts
  • difference
  • combination
  • crucial
  • effective
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