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Some people prefer to work on school projects with a group, while others would rather work alone. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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The discussion about whether or
not several
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not, several
 human being enthusiastic to
work
 on institution
project
 with a
community
, since
other
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the other
 would preference
work
 alone is a controversial one. There are people on both sides of the argument who have extremely strong feelings. In
this
 essay, I will talk about both sides of the argument.
Firstly
,
majority
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the majority
 of the individuals wish to
work
 on
school
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a school project
school projects
project
 with a
community
 which constitute the understanding and collaboration.
For example
, particularly in school
project
 if someone wants to organize career related events, seminar, and so on,
group
work
 would be fascinating. In
community
work
, people will much associated with communication, collaboration and planning where everyone will share their thought and planning which usually come up with straightforward. Another example is that, numerous issues can be found while working and which will resolve by
group
 working with
community
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the community
communities
.
On the other hand
, there are several arguments against
majority
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the majority
a majority
 of the individuals wish to
work
 on
school
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a school project
school projects
project
 with a
community
, while others would whatsoever
work
 alone.
First point
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The first point
 is that, some of the individuals presume that
work
 alone at home is suitable rather than working with
group
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the group
a group
groups
. They would not like to share their knowledge with others because of having much ego. Individual
work
 come up with
illustration
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illustrations
an illustration
 and
ego
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an ego
egos
 that could affect those who love
to
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for
of
 working with
community
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the community
communities
.
Further point
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The further point
 is that, some people never like
to associated
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to associate
to be associated
 with
group
work
 because of used to
work
 by alone situation. In conclusion, a likely reason why some individuals prefer to
work
 with a
group
 and someone
prefer
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prefers
 to
work
 alone because the
person whoever
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person, whoever
are
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is
 the gregarious, they would like to
work
 with
group
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groups
the group
a group
 and those are not friendly and have some ego problem, they
might be disagree
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might disagree
 having
work
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worked
 with
community
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the community
communities
. I think that everyone should get together and begin
work
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working
 with
community
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communities
the community
a community
 that will be more beneficial and making collaboration with each others.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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