An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online.

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It is certainly true that online shopping is becoming an increasingly popular.
This
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type of development is very
conveint
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
for
indiviuals
a human being
individuals
and helps
company
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companies
to increase their revenue
,
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,
but there are some disadvantages of
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trend
also
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.
to
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To
commene
take the first step or steps in carrying out an action
commence
with, there are some aspects of internet shopping which have proven beneficial for people and businesses. With regard to
indiviual
a human being
individual
,
this
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process provides
customer facility
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the customer facility
of
convience
document effecting a property transfer
conveyance
.By sitting at the comfort of home, a person can buy what he wants without going to shops and malls
.
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.
Moreover
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,
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,
anyone can buy anytime
,
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,
anything and anywhere because online stores are
opened
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open
24 hours and
person
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the person
can buy stuff according to his
conveince
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
. If we consider
comapnies
an institution created to conduct business
companies
,
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developments
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development
has brought plus point to them. Selling online has reduced the total cost of
product
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production
producing
since there is no need to
built
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build
big and flashy shops to attract customers
.
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.
As a result
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,
comapnies
an institution created to conduct business
companies
can sell products on high
margain
the boundary line or the area immediately inside the boundary
margin
margins
and gain more profit.
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,
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,
e-
commercing
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commerce
commercial
commercials
is advantageous to not only for
customers but
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customers, but
also
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manufacturers
,
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,
too.
Furhermore
in addition
Furthermore
,
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,
there is no scepticism internet shopping has negative impact on buyers and sellers.
Firstly
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,
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,
sometimes
innonecent
free from evil or guilt
innocent
customers become the prey of cyber crime by hackers. They hack their online bank account details and
tranfer
transfer somebody to a different position or location of work
transfer
the money to their own accounts
.
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.
it
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It
is clearly seen that increasing trend of buying online
directlt
without deviation
directly
linked to increasing
rate
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rates
of cyber crime.
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evolution has some drawbacks for manufacture too.
to
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To
sell products online
,
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,
seller
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the seller
has to face stiff
competion
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
compassion
with others sellers on
global level
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a global level
.
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consequently
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Consequently
,
this
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has become
thre
definite article
the
their
reason of mounting stress to bring unique products with best price to be successful in online
bussiness
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
.
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hence
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
Hence
, online shopping has some drawbacks for customer and seller. In
concluson
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conclusions
,
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,
online shopping has become very common in
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contemporary society.
Although
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it has some plus points
,
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,
sometimes its negatives create
threat
Suggestion
a threat
between people about insecure money transactions and manufactures have to do rigours
endevour
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
endeavours
endeavoured
to provide different options to
custemors
someone who pays for goods or services
customers
customize
customise
.
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