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Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports starts are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

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High salary of
celeberities
a widely known person
celebrities
 has always been a
controverstiol
 issue. Some people believe that actors
,
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,
musicians and
sportspersons
 charge money exorbitantly high. I agree with the given
statementant
 and I think
salaries
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the salaries
 of teachers and doctors
shuld
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
 be
high
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higher
 because of their inspirational contribution to the
society
 cannot be underestimated. To commence with
,
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,
there are some reasons to go in favour of
high salaries
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the high salaries
 of these
celebriteis
a widely known person
celebrities
.
Firstly
, these famous people have reached
zeinth
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the zenith
zenith
scent
 of success after rigorous
endevour
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
.
in
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In
 other words,
this
 success is not
a
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an
effotr
earnest and conscientious activity intended to do or accomplish something
effort
 of few days
,
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,
 they get
this
 position after so many sacrifices.
For example
,
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,
ronaldo
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Ronaldo
 is
afamous
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a famous
 football
playes
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player
players
 and has
became
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become
 world famous
,
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,
 but only few people knows in
ealy day
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the early day
early day
early days
yearly day
 of his career he used to practice 1000kicks in a day.
Secondly
,
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,
these stars are an ambassador of our culture and they
disemminate
cause to become widely known
disseminate
disseminated
 our
traditin
an inherited pattern of thought or action
tradition
traditions
 in a whole world and raise the
felling
the experiencing of affective and emotional states
feeling
 of patriotism and pride among
cotry
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
 people.
Finally
, they get
this
 popularity in
society
 at the cost of their personal life because
media
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the media
 always invade in their personal way of living.
therfore
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Therefore
Therfore
, these personalities deserve high salaries. In terms of other professions
,
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,
such
 as Doctors and teachers
also
 need to get
high
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higher
 salaries because of the following reasons.
the
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The
 prime reason is that their contribution in the
society
's development as significant as other famous person.
to
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To
 elaborate, teachers play a significant role in converting a child into
responsible citizen
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responsible citizens
a responsible citizen
. It is well known fact that
future
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the future
 of
country
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the country
a country
countries
 depends on the generation we are rearing today.
On the other hand
, doctors are
cosiderded
carefully weighed
considered
 as a God on earth. They strive to provide good health care to the natives of the countries and
this
 leads to
healty
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
 population which
further
 help
o
in the direction of
to
 increase the productivity
ogf
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 the
countery
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
.
hence
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
Hence
,
Accept space
,
 services of doctors and teachers cannot be
underlooked
coordinate in such a way that all parts work together effectively
interlocked
 that's why
thwy
people in general
they
 deserve to earn better salaries. In
conclusin
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conclusions
, high incomes of
playes
participate in games or sport
plays
, artists and musicians are justified
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 of their role is significant in the
society
.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 doctors and teachers should not be neglected in terms of salaries because their contribution in
devolping
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
developing
 a country id a mag
ificant
being effective without wasting time or effort or expense
efficient
officiant

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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