Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports starts are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid?

High salary of
celeberities
a widely known person
celebrities
has always been a
controverstiol
issue. Some people believe that actors
,
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,
musicians and
sportspersons
charge money exorbitantly high. I agree with the given
statementant
and I think
salaries
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the salaries
of teachers and doctors
shuld
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
be
high
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higher
because of their inspirational contribution to the
society
cannot be underestimated. To commence with
,
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,
there are some reasons to go in favour of
high salaries
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the high salaries
of these
celebriteis
a widely known person
celebrities
.
Firstly
, these famous people have reached
zeinth
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the zenith
zenith
scent
of success after rigorous
endevour
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
.
in
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In
other words,
this
success is not
a
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an
effotr
earnest and conscientious activity intended to do or accomplish something
effort
of few days
,
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,
they get
this
position after so many sacrifices.
For example
,
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,
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Ronaldo
is
afamous
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a famous
football
playes
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player
players
and has
became
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become
world famous
,
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,
but only few people knows in
ealy day
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the early day
early day
early days
yearly day
of his career he used to practice 1000kicks in a day.
Secondly
,
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,
these stars are an ambassador of our culture and they
disemminate
cause to become widely known
disseminate
disseminated
our
traditin
an inherited pattern of thought or action
tradition
traditions
in a whole world and raise the
felling
the experiencing of affective and emotional states
feeling
of patriotism and pride among
cotry
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
people.
Finally
, they get
this
popularity in
society
at the cost of their personal life because
media
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the media
always invade in their personal way of living.
therfore
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Therefore
Therfore
, these personalities deserve high salaries. In terms of other professions
,
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,
such
as Doctors and teachers
also
need to get
high
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higher
salaries because of the following reasons.
the
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The
prime reason is that their contribution in the
society
's development as significant as other famous person.
to
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To
elaborate, teachers play a significant role in converting a child into
responsible citizen
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responsible citizens
a responsible citizen
. It is well known fact that
future
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the future
of
country
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the country
a country
countries
depends on the generation we are rearing today.
On the other hand
, doctors are
cosiderded
carefully weighed
considered
as a God on earth. They strive to provide good health care to the natives of the countries and
this
leads to
healty
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
population which
further
help
o
in the direction of
to
increase the productivity
ogf
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
the
countery
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
.
hence
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
Hence
,
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,
services of doctors and teachers cannot be
underlooked
coordinate in such a way that all parts work together effectively
interlocked
that's why
thwy
people in general
they
deserve to earn better salaries. In
conclusin
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conclusions
, high incomes of
playes
participate in games or sport
plays
, artists and musicians are justified
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
of their role is significant in the
society
.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
doctors and teachers should not be neglected in terms of salaries because their contribution in
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relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
developing
a country id a mag
ificant
being effective without wasting time or effort or expense
efficient
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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