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Some people think governments should spend money on faster means of public transport. However, others think money should be spent on other priorities (eg cost, environment). Discuss both view and give your own opinion

#people #governments #money #transport #priorities #eg #cost #environment
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Some
people
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 argue that spending money on faster forms of public transportation is important as opposed to spending money on other vital aspects .
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 essay will discuss both views and give my own opinion . On the one hand , providing
people
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 with faster means of public transportation would bring certain benefits . By adopting
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 method,those of us
especiallly
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especially
 who are commuters , will reduce time for travelling from work and to work .
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 means that they will have more free time ,
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 thereby enhancing their productivity at
workplace
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 ,
people
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 are less packed in cramped and hot buses . They will not need to rush to arrive at work on time and get up early so as to wait for a bus station . or eventually
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 a seat on a bus .
On the other hand
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 , a number of reasons lead to the
improtance
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importance
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further
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 investment in other priorities . One of the compelling reasons is environmental problems .
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 an increasing number of personal vehicles , large quantities of carbon dioxide are being released into the atmosphere,causing
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the degradation of air quality , which is considered to be a significant contributor to a variety of respiratory diseases. Another crucial problem is
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 high cost of living ,making many
people
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 have to cover
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basic daily needs .
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 to say ,
this
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 may lead to not only a decrease in economic growth but
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 other serious problems . In conclusion , I believe that improving the speed of public
transports
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 is advantageous for
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 .
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 , investing money in environmental issues and living expenses should be taken
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priority
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a priority
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 .
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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