Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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As the corporate world is rapidly changing and growing day by day. Some enterprises prefer that their workers dressed up with smart outfits while other entities suppose that
employer’s output
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the employers’ output
employers’ output
of work should be better than their dressings. In
this
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essay, I am going to discuss both of the
views but
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views, but
I opine that in corporate environment appearance matters and have an edge over quality of work.
To begin
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with, in
corporate world
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the corporate world
; Most of the staff members have to interact globally. At
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level, when you are authorized to do conversations at
MNC level
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the MNC level
on
global platform
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a global platform
. The
first
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priority is to be dressed up smartly and perfectly to put your point in the front of opposition.
For instance
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, In human interaction at global level, doing
this
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not only increases
respect but
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respect, but
people are more
involve
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involved
into your talks.
Secondly
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, Good dressing will definitely going to put an impression on your client.
Also
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, It
boost
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boosts
up
workers confidence
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the workers' confidence
workers' confidence
and their productivity will be
sky-rocketed
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skyrocketing
skyrocketed
.
For example
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, If any employee is wearing a decent dress with
company’s brand name
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the company’s brand name
on it.
Then
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, at the time of any presentation and conversation employee is advertising their brand which
have
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has
biggest role
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the biggest role
in convincing someone than their product.
However
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, in current scenario; some employers prefer working skills over dressing skills of their employees. But the truth is MNC’s output will be benefitted by good revenue generated performance that will be
boost
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boosted
up highly if their staff members can convince others to buy their company’s products rather than internal non-profit oriented performances. To conclude, Appearance not only increases
respect but
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respect, but
it generates revenues as well and in
this
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today corporate world brilliant dressing skills
is definitely have
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will definitely have
definitely have
are definitely having
have definitely had
an edge over working skills.

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