The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie charts demonstrate the advantages and disadvantages experienced by tourists visiting
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Bowmen Island. The Survey consists of eight categories in the
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, most
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agreed that the locals were friendly and the island has scenic views,
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the majority of the visitors were not happy with the expensive housing arrangement. The tourists were satisfied with the four categories, out of which over three-quarters(77%) of the visitors found that the greatest advantages
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the island were the friendly
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and the appealing scenery.Cultural sites were
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given preference, listed by 12% of the
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as an advantage. A small group of
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(11%), found the accommodation to be adequate as well.
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, 50% of the survey responders were unsatisfied with the high living cost.
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, bad Weather
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and the lack of entertainment were the
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major disadvantages,15% and 25% respectively.
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small percentage(11%) of the
people
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complained about the food quality.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • According to the survey
  • Visitors reported
  • The pie charts show
  • The most common advantages/disadvantages
  • A significant proportion
  • A small percentage
  • In contrast
  • Notably
  • The largest segment
  • Similarly
  • On the other hand
  • A major advantage/disadvantage
  • To highlight
  • Overall effect
  • Impact the experience
  • In summary
  • Illustrates
  • Reflects
  • Highlights
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