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Many people prefer to spend money and not save it. What are the reasons? Is this positive or negative development?

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There are different views about
long term trip
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a long term trip
 to experience word after high
school
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. Some young students believe that travelling abroad for one
year
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 would open their minds and improves their practical knowledge, On the other side, some
believes
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believe
 spend a
year
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 during the most active and energetic times of youth in travelling is not acceptable and does not make any sense. In my opinion a
gap
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year
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 travelling should be taken before students will involve in true
live
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life
,
this
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 could help them to choose suitable university subjects or apply proper jobs wisely. It is nice if the test of experience applied, graduated at high
school
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 generally means you have learned some theoretical courses and it is hard to use them in the real word, being far from family and facing other cultures is a very good way to gain new skills or knowledge, but a
year
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 should be planned carefully to avoid any waste of time and money. It should be mentioned, perhaps there is no
second
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 chance to enjoy a
year
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 travel in whole life so it is worth it to try.
However
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, many students returning from a break in academic study find it very difficult to adjust to university activities and may end their study because of enjoying their daily life, or waste their
gap
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year
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 in worthless activities.
Gap
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-
year
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 students are a
year
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 behind their
high-
a public secondary school usually including grades 9 through 12
highschool
school
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 friends and have forgotten many of the lessons learned in
school
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. There are
also
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 many high
school
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 students who start a
gap
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-
year
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 with good intentions, but fail to a worthwhile activity and end up wasting their time. In conclusion, I believe that a
gap
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year
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 travelling could be measured as
second
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 part of high
school
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 education, which provides students with a different kind of learning to open their minds for future planning based on real knowledge so the benefits of
gap
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 years in outweigh the problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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