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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest of our lives, while others believe that adult life brings more happiness. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest of our lives, while others believe that
adult
life
 brings more
happiness
. Discuss
both
 these views and give your own
opinion
. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Sample Answer 1:
Happiness
 is very hard to define and it varies from person to person. While some people strive for economic success and a good social
life
 and think that those are the main ingredient for
happiness
,
on the co
ntrary people w
Accept comma addition
contrary, people
ho already have amassed enough riches and enjoy a good social and personal
life
 thinks other aspects of
life
 for being happy. The issue whether teenage times are the happiest
part
 of our lives or not is a debatable issue and people are divided in their
opinion
 regarding
this
. According to another group,
adult
part
 of the
life
 is happier
part
 of our li
ves.
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life
In my
opinion
,
both
 groups have their reasoning and
happiness
 is a state of mind that can be achieved in
both
 parts of the
life
. Teen ages are the ages of dream, freedom and recklessness.
This
 is the period when most of the teenagers do not have greater responsibilities like
adult
 people and they enjoy li
ves f
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living
ull of jo
ys,
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joy
dream, vi
sion.
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a vision
the vision
Le
ss complexity o
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The Less complexity
f
life
 touches the teenagers and the struggles they face often get redeemed with time. The harsh cruelty and complexity of
life
 rarely touch the teenagers and they live a
life
 which is often better than the
adult
 people around them. Yet,
this
 is not always true; many teenagers struggle a lot to support their family and suffer from psychological issues that might make their lives pretty complex. They mostly depend on their parents for money and are mostly guided by their parents for decisions. There are many untouched parts of
life
 that they can’t enjoy and
on the other hand
 that makes them less stressful. They enjoy a sound physical condition and rarely suffer from illness related to old ages.
On the contrary
,
adult
life
 offers more economic freedom in one hand and
on the contrary
 many unavoidable responsibilities. The grown-up people decide their journey of
life
 themselves and
this
 is a freedom very few teenagers enjoy. The
happiness
 a father feels while playing with his sons and daughters is unimaginable for a teenager.
On the contrary
, the suffering a father or a mother endures on their hearts for the well-being of their children is
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are
also
 inconceivable for teenagers. The work pressure, the responsibility, the physical conditions, the complexities and harsh reality of
life
 make the matured
life
 often unbearable and those people consider their teenage
part
 as the happiest
part
 of their
life
. Old times are good times and
this
 is true for all of us. We revere the bygone times and the present is the reality which is not always smooth. In my
opinion
,
life
 is as it is and being able to ha
ppy i
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happily
happiness
s
not abide b
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is not abiding
y any rules or times. Our head is a place where we can make the hell into the heaven and
both
 earlier ages and grown up ages of our lives have their offering for being happy. We need to decide whether we want to be happy and contented with whatever we have or complain about the
life
.
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