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In many countries around the world young people decide to leave their parents' home once they finish school.They start living on their own or sharing a home with friends. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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In many nations, young people decide to move out once they graduate from school and share a rented place with friends. In my opinion,
this
 has both benefits and drawbacks.
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Accept space
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thesis
Suggestion
Thesis
 statement) Living by themselves helps young people to become more independent.
First
, they will learn the value of
money
 management. As they are given
money
 to pay for bills
such
 as the rent, electricity bills, telephone fees and food. If they overspent on food they would not be able to pay for other bills.
Second
, they will learn how to manage time. Living on their own,
in addition
 to study/work, playing and sleeping, young people have to do the cooking and washing themselves. If they overslept or overplayed, they would have to go without food or clean clothes. So they have to plan a timetable and follow it.
However
, young people usually feel lonely. When they finish a day of work/study, they often return to their house, with no loved ones to share the good news as well as problems.
Second
, they can easily play with
wrong friends
Suggestion
the wrong friends
 and may become addicted to drugs and alcohol. If they do not manage
money
 carefully/wisely, they will probably not have enough
money
 to pay the rent, which may result in being evicted.
Then
 they will probably need to borrow
money
. A big debt may push them into doing things illegally,
eg
.
selling
Suggestion
Selling
 drugs. In conclusion, school leavers moving out of their parents’ house to start living on their own will possibly help them to become more independent.
However
, the drawbacks of
this
 should not be overlooked.

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