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Some believe that student's success is mainly based on the quality of their teaching while others think it has more to do with the student's attitude. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is no doubt that most pupils want to be academically successful in their lives.
Although
 some believe that
this
 success is highly dependent on their teachers, I would argue that it is dependent on their own attitude. On the one hand, people who believe in dominance of quality of teaching in a
minor's
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minor
accomplishments
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accomplishment
 might argue that a teacher can make or break a student's life.
This
 is because the children can easily get influenced by their mentors and follow them.
For instance
, if a teacher teaches the advantages of smoking
instead
 of its detrimental effects, the number of smoking students will potentially grow. In the contrast, if there is
On the other hand
, In conclusion, while some argue about the importance of good teaching techniques as teachers can largely influence their pupils, I firmly believe that a student's own determination is the most prominent thing that leads to their success.

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