The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. --DELETED LINK--

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table shows the structure of student
enrolments
in 1937, 1967 and 2017. Taking the
amount
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of students first, there was
a
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very significant growth. The
quantity
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of
enrolments
in 2017 got almost 20 times higher than in 1937. 
Overall
,
however
,
finally
, reaching,
moreover
, what else. Turning to gender variation
females
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enrolments
percentage decreased between 1937 and 1967 from 45% to 35% only to go up to 55% in 2017. 
However
, the biggest change was noticed in the percentage of students living within 50 miles of Manchester. During those 80 years, it dramatically went down from 55% to only 1-2%.  It is closely connected to other data presented in the table -
percentage
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of overseas
enrolments
. Even though between 1937 and 1967 the growth was hardly noticeable, it boosted in another 40 years, making 32% in 2017.
Moreover
, the
amount
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of countries got much bigger as well. Starting with 4 in 1937, reaching 26 in 1967 only to grow much more significantly -
into
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102 in 2017.

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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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