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In Recent Years Many Local Shops Have Closed Because Customers Travel To Large Shopping Malls

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The positive side is that the customers prefers to buy their ho
use hold i
a social unit living together
household
tems from shopping malls where they get the provision to shop for a wide variety of grocery items
such
 as vegetables, fruits, baked items and so on. There is a
e
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an
xpiry date
that is
 provided on each of the goods that are purchased at these stores which help the buyer know that certain products can be used for a week or a certain period of
time
. The meat, fish and selected products are stored in refrigerators that keep the food fresh for longer. At the shopping ce
nters p
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
eople benefit from buying other products as well
such
 as clothes, gi
fts,
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Gifts
Accessories which he
lps t
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help
hem to buy all at
o
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in
ne go. The items bought in the stores are thought to be durable. Some customers prefer branded good which are popular and they would not mind spending more as some are very brand conscious. The negative side of not having small local shops is that some customers would like to buy urgent items from these shops as it saves
time
 and there are less qu
es.
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cues
cash
queues
Apart from
this
 the cost of the items would be affordable. Small stores have a wide range of items at times that are not available in large shopping malls. People would prefer to walk down the street and buy a
i
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an
mportant item rather than go to the mall and try to find parking space
this
 would save
time
 for the customer. Small shops are important for communities and the middle class as not everyone can afford to buy expensive products. From my analysis I would suggest that both are important developments as the poor could benefit from small stores and the rich prefer to spend their
time
 at the shopping malls.

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