The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)
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The diagram below shows the average
hours
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of unpaid
work
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per
week
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done by people in different categories. In
this
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statement, the claimer said unpaid
work
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refers to activities
such
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as childcare at home, housework and gardening. The graph bars show three classifications
such
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as, without
children
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, with one to two
children
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and people with more than three
children
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.
Married
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For married
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Women
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without
children
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unpaid
work
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per
week
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is 30
hours
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and
men
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are about 20
hours
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of unpaid
work
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per
week
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. Married
women
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with one to two
children
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are about 50 and the time spent
in
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by
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men
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is still 50
hours
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per
week
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. More unpaid
work
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per
week
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when more than three
women
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have
children
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It is 60
hours
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per
week
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. But married
men
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here are still less than 20
hours
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per
week
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. We can find the times change in married
women
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more than in married
men
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.
Men
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almost change with any amount of
children
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, work, week, children, women, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • demographics
  • household responsibilities
  • societal expectations
  • norms
  • childcare
  • housework
  • gardening
  • contributions
  • family structure
  • cultural implications
  • social implications
  • work-life balance
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