The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)
The diagram below shows the average
hours
of unpaid
work
per
week
done by people in different categories. In
this
statement, the claimer said unpaid
work
refers to activities
such
as childcare at home, housework and gardening. The graph bars show three classifications
such
as, without
children
, with one to two
children
and people with more than three
children
.
Married
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For married
show examples
Women
without
children
unpaid
work
per
week
is 30
hours
and
men
are about 20
hours
of unpaid
work
per
week
. Married
women
with one to two
children
are about 50 and the time spent
in
Change preposition
by
show examples
men
is still 50
hours
per
week
. More unpaid
work
per
week
when more than three
women
have
children
It is 60
hours
per
week
. But married
men
here are still less than 20
hours
per
week
. We can find the times change in married
women
more than in married
men
.
Men
almost change with any amount of
children
.
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