Some people think exposure to modern technology at an earlier age is good for children, while others claim that it is harmful for their development. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Over the past few decades,
technology
has completely changed virtually every aspect of our (avoid using this
in academic writing) society. One of the differences that have been most noticeable is the change in the way that children use
technological devices at a very young age
from those of previous generations (grammar
). It is argued by some people that early exposure to advances in technology
is beneficial for children’s development while
others believe that it has a detrimental Accept comma addition
development, while
impact
on children. This
essay will elaborate on both positive and negative effects of exposing (use
the passive here) modern technology
at such
a young age
.
On the other hand
, there are two main disadvantages of these technological inventions with the early children’s exposure (expression
). To begin
with, overdependence
on modern technology
, young people will face (grammar
) the risk
of mental and physical health problems. According to a four-year study by the University of Hong Kong found that the more time children are heavily reliant (2 grammar
mistakes) on digital devices, the more likely they were to be overweight and the risk
of being overweight increased by 19.4 per cent. What is more, for children who spent an extra hour a day playing games on computers, tablets or other electronic devices, the risk
of developing emotional problems increased by 23.2 per cent, and the risk
of deficit hyperactivity (write the correct name of the disorder) increased by 32 percent when they were older (you may omit this
part because it is related to attention
span). As a result
, overuse of technology
at such
a young age
will have negative
Suggestion
a negative impact
impact
on children’s health.
Secondly
, young children do have relatively short attention
spans when they are exposed to the technology
from a very young age
. It is evidenced by (expression
) Matt Richtel of the New York Times that students’ constant
Suggestion
the students’ constant use
use
of digital technology
is hampering their attention
spans, which is supposed by their teachers (expression
). A study carried out by Ellen Galinsky of the Huffington Post was found (grammar
) that 87% (87% of what/ who?) report
that these technologies are creating an easily distracted young generation with short Suggestion
Report
attention
spans, and 64% say that kids do more to divert attention
from digital technologies than to help them academically (what do you mean by this
?). These research
have (Suggestion
researches
grammar
) shown that using modern technology
leads to minimize (expression
) children's attention
spans.
On the flip side (cụm từ này được dùng khi
nói về mặt ko
tốt), it is undeniable that children’s early a hard ferromagnetic silver-white bivalent or trivalent metallic element; a trace element in plant and animal nutrition
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use
of technological devices has a positive impact
on children's development for ages (expression
). In this
technology
-driven society, most early childhood educators see the technology
as a valuable activity center
for learning. Research by Haugland (1992) has shown that 3-and 4-year-old children who an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
use
computer
(the computer) with supporting activities that reinforce the major objectives of the programs (which ones?) Suggestion
computers
a computer
the computer
have
significant greater developmental gains (Suggestion
Have
grammar
) when compared to children without computer experiences in similar classrooms. The benefits of providing computers to kindergarten and primary-grade children are tremendous (word
choice), including improved motor skills, enhanced mathematical thinking, increased creativity, higher scores on tests of critical thinking and problem solving.
In addition
to (omit this
word
), children’s interest will be stimulated thanks to the modern technology
because technology
presents a wonderful opportunity to re-shape 21st-century education. Recent research in the US has indicated that the introduction of technology
makes 87% of students more likely to attend class and 72% of them more likely to participate. The other study by Smoothwall found that 96% of teachers believe technology
has had a positive impact
on the way children participate and learn in lessons.
To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying
that (you may omit Accept comma addition
down, saying
this
) while the excessive exposure technology
(grammar
) does more harm than good to the health and attention
span of children, children find it beneficial to use
technological devices for the purpose of learning experience and taking (not parallel) great interest in their classroom (word
choice). Hence
(add a comma after this
word
) the young
children should be encouraged to expose Suggestion
younger
technology
(expression
) daily to enhance their knowledge but
taking precaution (Accept comma addition
knowledge, but
grammar
) so that this
habit does not affect their development.Submitted by thuthuyvu2908 on
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