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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extend do you agree with this statement.

#inventors #society #doctors
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The 21st century is marked as the digital century where a contemporary world has witnessed countless potential people with diverse inventions leading to
new realization
Suggestion
a new realization
 that an idea has no limits.
In addition
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, it is a breakthrough in gene technology and effective treatment regimens. Developments have made our lives easier and more comfortable. I believe that both doctors and inventors play a significant role in life. There is no doubt that inventors have an important influence on
society
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. There have been many great inventions that are important for human development,
such
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 as machines and useful devices.
living
Suggestion
Living
 in the era of industry 4.0, wondering if without today's technology products, would human life have developed modernly? All of them realize that creative ideas help people get more convenience, career and gradually meet with their high quality needs. Of course,
those
plural of "this"
these
 products are not to mention the smart devices to support medicine.
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, doctors save lives. They are highly educated professionals and possess a wide range of knowledge related to physical and mental health. Doctors
also
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 make a difference by helping patients minimize pain, recover faster, or learn to live with
trauma
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the trauma
. They are likened to fairies who heal not only physically but
also
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 mentally.
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, doctors are always placed in one of
the high
Suggestion
the highest
 positions in
society
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. In conclusion, both doctors and inventors are wonderful people in the world, and both have
complementarity
of words or propositions so related that each is the negation of the other
complementary
. All of them have dedicated many great works to contribute to the development of our
society
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. Inventors are not as important to
society
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 as doctors. To what extend do you agree with
this
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 statement.

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