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Some people think that English will be the most common language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this impact?

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- Undoubtedly, everyone is hectic with unlimited issues which is
indispensible
not to be dispensed with; essential
indispensable
 to his everyday life. While some people see that knowing news either by reading the newspaper or through watching the TV is a great waste of time, I believe that the knowledge of the news is necessary
to
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for
every one
all people
everyone
 as it is
important cause
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an important cause
 to make him more intellectual beside being of great benefit for certain jobs as well. In the following lines, those main reasons will be
further
 pondered. To embark on, watching the local or global news is of paramount importance in terms of increasing the knowledge and the intelligence.
In other words
, If a person is keen to know the newest incidents about everything
,
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,
 That will certainly increase his culture and extroversion.
This
 can be exemplified by Steve Jobs,
this
 late genius designer
,
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,
 who had been keen on reading the international news every day even during the weekends.
This
 example shows that reading the news is a habit of
intellicual
of or associated with or requiring the use of the mind
intellectual
 people, the more a person will be aware of the global news, the more intelligent he will likely be.
In addition
 to that, some occupations
such
 as TRUCK DRIVERS and economists / economic experts need to be fully aware of the most updated news.
This
 is because when the weather changes or stock market soars they have to know that as soon as possible. An eminent example of
this
 is Egypt that HAD recently a strong THUNDERSTORM, and all citizens were settled in their homes following the news of that sudden weather change.
Thus
, not only are the news programs important for certain jobs, but
also
 it is pivotal to laymen especially in emergency cases. In conclusion, even though some people opine that it is a waste of time to know the news, I would like to argue THAT they are wrong /incorrect due to the fact that KNOWING THE NEWS is of great benefits for people to increase their intelligence and knowledge,
in addition
, it benefits
certAin
definite but not specified or identified
certain
 jobs
such
 as drivers TO DO THEIR JOBS. It is highly recommended that senior officials and decision makers to clarify
this
 fact for all people
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