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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter describe the problem with the equipment explain how this problem is affecting your work say what you want the shop or company to do

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Tourists
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now-a-days
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nowadays
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visits
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visit
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 places
such
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 as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic without having an idea
on
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of
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 how the climatic conditions would be. It will mostly affect the elderly or the children in the family and it may
also
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 spoil the whole vacation as they wouldn't be able to visit places or spend the holiday as expected.
Firstly
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, the
tourists
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 should analyse and discuss
about
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the location they have chosen for the vacation. They should check on the weather, the situation and the safety of the location. The
tourists
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 must be prepared for all those conditions so that will make the trip comfortable. In my experience, we as a whole family planned for a hill station trip. We did not know nor we did not check or discuss
about
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the condition there. It is already a cold place naturally and adding on it, we visited during the winter season. There was mist covered all over the highways that we couldn't see anything ahead. The cops have restricted the
tourists
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 and there were many accidents taking place. The whole day schedule was cancelled due to the weather and everybody remained at home which spoiled the whole trip. There are no
such
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 pros in any unplanned trips but only disadvantages and disappointments.
Tourists
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 can visit places where there are mild climatic conditions like
rainy
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the rainy
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 season which they should assure that it is enjoyable and it doesn't cause any illness to the people with them as vacations are to be remembered and not turn into a nightmare.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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