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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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In today’s era,
information
technology
 has evolved the way we used to live. Still, It is continuously transforming everyone’s life. Now,
information
technology
 is
significant part
Suggestion
a significant part
 of our home,
work
 and free-time activities.
This
eassy
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
 will discuss both benefits and drawbacks of
this
 change;
also
 conclude that there are more advantages than disadvantages.
To begin
 with, our lives are easier in comparison to
past
Suggestion
the past
 because of
information
technology
 and its multiple applications.
That is
 to say, people spend less time in daily chores,
such
 as go to market to buy vegetables or go for grocery shopping. Now, there are many online apps available to check products and their ratings to order. Most deliver the orders within a day and these apps provide priority delivery as well, which saves
lot
Suggestion
a lot
 of time in comparison to window shopping.
Moreover
, people can connect with their loved ones anytime and from anywhere with the help of
information
technology
. Many advanced platforms and apps are using cutting-edge
technology
 to provide seamless video and audio call facilities. Some of these give real life experience which could not be imagined a century ago.
Furthermore
, humans save time in commute and can
work
 in an emergency
also
.
This
 would mean that people are travelling less for
work
 due to modern
technology which
Accept comma addition
technology, which
 gives freedom to
work
 from home by providing new age tools. For an example, many offices are closed as a consequence of
Corona Virus outbreak
Suggestion
the Corona Virus outbreak
 and employees are asked to
work
 remotely to stop the spread globally.
On the contrary
, isolation is the emerging issue nowadays. To clarify, people are disconnected from each other since less face to face interactions happen. Everything is available at
fingertips
Suggestion
the fingertips
 and there is not much need to go out of
house
Suggestion
the house
 which affects social life drastically. As per a recent survey conducted by the ‘Times of India’ newspaper,
majority
Suggestion
the majority
 of youngsters in Bangalore, which is Sillicon Valley of India, hardly physically interact with their friends and relatives.
This
 considerably affects their relationships with them and sometimes they feel loneliness. It shows that
technology
 is making people less social and lazy too. In conclusion,
information
technology
 has more advantages than drawbacks which is clearly explained with relevant examples above.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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