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The bar chart below shows the different types of accommodation chosen by the British when they went on holiday in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the different types of accommodation chosen by the British when they went on holiday in 2010.
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The given bar chart demonstrates the proportion of various kinds of accommodation selected during vacation in 2010 by British people from different regions including England, Scotland, Wales and Northern Ireland. As can be seen from
above
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 graph , the percentage of people who used
hotel
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hotels
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was the most
prefered acommodation
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preferred accommodation
types
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type
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 in all four countries. Looking at the chart, in England, Scotland,
Wales
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and Wales
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, the figure
of
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 staying in
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hotel was the highest, at around 50% . After that, self-catering ranked
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second in
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 for
roughy
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 30%.
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, the number of two remaining forms
kept
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 at a lower level from 5% to 10% for each nation.
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 the percentage of
tourist
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tourists
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 who
choosing
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 camping form accounted for nearly twice
in
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 England and Wales during the whole time scale,
visitor
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visitors
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 in Scotland followed a contrasting
patten
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pattern
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.
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, the quantity of
traveller
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travellers
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 in
Northen
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Northern
 Ireland had a completely different trend. Just over 30% was the figure of tourists voting
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caravans in
clination
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inclination
clinician
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self-catering
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the self-catering
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 category and camping, with more than 10%.
It
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 noticeable that
caravan
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the caravan
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 form was more popular with British
visitor
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visitors
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 in
Nothern
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Northern
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 Ireland than the remaining nations.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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