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The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.
This
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 diagram allows us to take a glance into how
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geothermal
energy
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 is produced from cold
water
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. Geothermal
energy
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also
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 termed
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clean/green power has been generated and consumed
from
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 ages, and as we all know, we are in a state of emergency when it comes to
environmental
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 crisis.
this
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 diagram gives info about how geothermal
energy
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 is produced in the geothermal power plants from chilly
water
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 to
energy
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 which is circulated through the electric poles.
At
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 the beginning, we can see that
,
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 there is a container in which cold and fresh
water
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 is stored which is to be
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 processed into the plant. The liquid is run into the plant through a tunnel which is 4.5kms deep,
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 liquid is
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 injected into an injection well where there are ample
amount
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 of hot and warm rocks which heats up the liquid to its boiling point. Moving on as the
water
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 gets heated up to its
limit's
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,
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that blazing hot
water
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 is pushed up through the production well to the ground level. Afterwards,
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heated up
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water
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 is passed into a condenser where the steam is pressurised, these gases will eventually power the turbines to spin swiftly enough to energize the generator.
This
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 equipment will
finally
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 generate the charge and pass
on
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 to the poles to light up the cities and provide current to all the surrounding civilizations.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • geothermal energy
  • generate electricity
  • diagram
  • volcano
  • magma reservoirs
  • deep underground
  • heat
  • steam
  • geothermal plant
  • turbine
  • condensed
  • pumped back
  • underground reservoirs
  • transmitted
  • power grid
  • distribution
  • continuous
  • renewable
  • volcanic activity
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