The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

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geothermal

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is produced from cold

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. Geothermal

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clean/green power has been generated and consumed

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ages, and as we all know, we are in a state of emergency when it comes to

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diagram gives info about how geothermal

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is produced in the geothermal power plants from chilly

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which is circulated through the electric poles.

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there is a container in which cold and fresh

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is stored which is to be

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processed into the plant. The liquid is run into the plant through a tunnel which is 4.5kms deep,

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liquid is

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injected into an injection well where there are ample

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of hot and warm rocks which heats up the liquid to its boiling point. Moving on as the

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gets heated up to its

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that blazing hot

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is pushed up through the production well to the ground level. Afterwards,

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heated up

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is passed into a condenser where the steam is pressurised, these gases will eventually power the turbines to spin swiftly enough to energize the generator.

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generate the charge and pass

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to the poles to light up the cities and provide current to all the surrounding civilizations.

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Single idea per paragraph

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Topic Vocabulary:

geothermal energy
generate electricity
diagram
volcano
magma reservoirs
deep underground
heat
steam
geothermal plant
turbine
condensed
pumped back
underground reservoirs
transmitted
power grid
distribution
continuous
renewable
volcanic activity

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The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

Some people think that Olympic game are exciting events that bring other nations together. Others say Olympics is a waste of money and the money could be better spend on other things. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Discipline is ever increasing probelm in modern schools. Some people think that discpline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others this that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinioon.

It is thought by some that is better to live in a city while others believe it is better to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Art should be a compulsory class for high school students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many developed countries are giving financial aid to poor countries. However, this hasn’t solved the problem of poverty in these nations and so other types of help are needed. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?