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Being a celebrity can bring benefits and problems at the same time. To what extent do you agree on this statement?

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Everyone has a desire to become famous when he or she sees people of his profession getting success. It makes him feel that
life
 of renewed individual is lavish. But, it has some problems
also
 I fully agree with
this
 viewpoint. It is true by becoming a famous person gets the source of earning. Sportsmen are offered many
advertisement
Suggestion
advertisements
 become additional income.
For instance
,
annual income
Suggestion
the annual income
 of Mr
virat
Suggestion
Virat
kohli
Suggestion
Kohli
 is 200crore by endorsement of different product by Hindustan times.
In addition
 actor's are invited at the opening of showroom, Mall and restaurants.
Hence
, being
celebrity
 gives financial support.
On the other hand
, every argument has two sides. There
are
Suggestion
is
 some problem
associated being a
Suggestion
associated with being a
 famous person. Privacy is right of everyone which almost ended. Media tries to cover each and every detail of
celebrity
 like where they go, what is eaten by them and who dates whom. It irritates the person.
Moreover
, the problem of depression of not being
success
Suggestion
successful
 speciality in actor's forces them to take
wrong step
Suggestion
a wrong step
the wrong step
wrong steps
. Suicide is considered to be a only of the problem. Overall,
life
 being a
celebrity
 is not easy. In conclusion, mony and success is not found in the
life
 of
celebrity
 only it depend on human how
life
 is lived by him
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