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Some people believe that preserving natural environment is crucial, however, most make no effort to do so. Why do you think this is happening? What are some simple actions that could help the environment?

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It is commonly believed that preservation of natural resources is imperative, yet most people seem to exert no effort in doing so. Understanding the causes of
this
 negligent attitude may help with devising some simple measures to safeguard the deteriorating environment. Lack of awareness is probably the foremost reason why the vast majority of individuals
appears
Suggestion
appear
 to be unmindful of the current environmental issues. Normally, people have
tendency
Suggestion
tended
 to downplay abstract problems, or those that likely to happen in the distant future.
This
 is because they are not properly informed of the possible detrimental effects of taking the environment for granted. To illustrate, residents in urban areas often deliberately dump their
wastes
Suggestion
waste
 into the nearby creeks and drainage canals causing them to become clogged. It is only when devastating floods strike, that they come to realize the consequences of their actions. Some basic solutions that could be carried out are extensive awareness campaign through all forms of communication and strict implementation of waste management.
In addition
 to the traditional press, social media is a powerful means of disseminating information regarding the impending disasters and their potential hazards.
This
 is a good way of persuading the public to actively take part in the campaign. Another straightforward solution, and by far the least anyone can do to help save the nature is
disposing
Suggestion
disposed
 of garbage thoughtfully. Apart from avoiding throwing trash anywhere, everyone should practice proper segregation of biodegradable, non-biodegradable, and recyclable wastes at all times. These actions, when coordinated by the local governments, can be tremendously successful. In conclusion, while individual awareness is key to maintaining a healthy ecosystem, concerted efforts of governments and their citizens are much more effective in achieving
such
 goal.
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