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In many countries, a small number of people are able to purchase very expensive luxurious products. Some people believe that this is good for the economy, but others think that governments should not allow products above a certain price level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, the market of luxury goods is experiencing a growth all over the world. Some people are of the opinion that
this
 issue has a positive bearing on the economy, while others opine that governments should stop the pricing on products above a certain level.
Although
 I agree with the former statement, both arguments will be discussed in
this
 essay in order to reach a conclusion. Some people claim that luxurious commodities have illusory prices. There are some arguments concerning
this
 issue.
To begin
 with, they believe that spending money for purchasing these products is a waste of money and results in an uneven development in terms of representing people’s positions in societies. A regional disparity in fact breeds negative influences
such
 as increasing corruption in societies. These expensive luxurious goods
furthermore
 lead to increase the price of other similar products that are produced by unknown companies. To clarify, the decision of buying a luxurious commodity is based on prestige and uniqueness, not on technical and functional factors and it means that other producing firms will take an action to boost the prices of their products from reaching a fake prestige in the market.
On the other hand
, it seems to me that luxurious products have a positive effect on the economy. It primarily encourages people to make hard efforts to acquire more revenue for obtaining these types of products. Indeed, it is beneficial for getting their own sense of self-worth. It
moreover
 helps some businesses which only sell
this
 kind of goods. The Rolex as a watch producer is,
for instance
 based on luxurious watches, which has created jobs for myriads of people around the world. In conclusion,
although
 in some circumstances, the extravagantly unique goods affect on an uneven wealth distribution,
nevertheless
, to my way of thinking, it helps a society for having a dynamic economy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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