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Governments should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#governments #effort #alternative #sources #energy
it
Suggestion
It
 is certainly true that
natural resources
Suggestion
the natural resources
 of
energy
 have become the focus of everyone's concern.Some people authorities should exhort people to use them.I
completly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
 agree with the given suggestion
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 to save our
enviornment
the totality of surrounding conditions
environment
 and
this
 is the best option. To commence with, the main reason to go in favour of
alternative source
Suggestion
the alternative source
alternative sources
,
such
 as solar
energy
,
Accept space
,
hydro
energy
 and wind
energy
 because they are clean and green source of
enegy
(physics) a thermodynamic quantity equivalent to the capacity of a physical system to do work; the units of energy are joules or ergs
energy
 production.
in
Suggestion
In
 other words,
amount
Suggestion
the amount
 of
carbondioxide
Suggestion
carbon dioxide
 is emitted by these sources is nil.So, pollution is very low.
we
Suggestion
We
 are using
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spearheading
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • transitioning
  • economic implications
  • government policies
  • research and development
  • national energy security
  • public-private sector collaboration
  • diversifying
  • environmental impact
  • clean energy
  • industry growth
  • dependence on imported fuels
  • alternative sources
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