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Nowadays, people are spending more time away from their homes because they spend longer in their workplace. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

#people #time #homes #workplace
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Spending time with the loved ones or family is becoming challenging these days as the demand to
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 more is the recent trend at the workplaces and
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 trend poses a greater number of losses than the benefits,
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 essay will discuss both benefits and losses in detail. Key to a healthy life of an
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 is perfect
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 life
balance
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, when
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balance
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 is lost the concentration or the focus at the
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 place is greatly impacted which means
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 the number of working hours are more but the productive hours might reduce as the
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 might experience stress, Not only the mental concentration of the
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 but his family suffers as the children do not get proper attention or the parenting which is essential for proper growth and well-being of the children,
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 consider a case where the father and mother is working for longer hours and leaving the children at the day care will impact the relationship of the child with his parents,
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 longer working hours will impact the health of an
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 as he/she might not get adequate sleep which can contribute to the risk of cardio-vascular diseases and obesity at an younger age. Working longer hours can be beneficial if the
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 is paid for additional hours,
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 is true if there is only one person in the family making active income in
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 case entire family is dependent on one pay check,
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 is beneficial when a new
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 is getting trained or learning the new
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 as it does one gain more experience and comfort with
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work environment
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the work environment
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, understanding the operating principles of a
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 place makes
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employees
an employee
the employee
 more productive in a short time, but once the
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 completes certain hours of training
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 might not be needed. To Conclude, While working for a
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long
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 places definitely has few advantages,
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 the number of disadvantages are comparatively more and is definitely not recommended for a healthy
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-life
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, at the end its crucial to have a
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 to create a productive
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 environment and have a happy family life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career progression
  • earning potential
  • enhanced productivity
  • skill sets
  • work-life balance
  • personal well-being
  • negatively impacting
  • increased stress
  • health issues
  • burnout
  • cardiovascular diseases
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