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Some people feel that entertainers (e.g. films stars, pop musicians or sports starts) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Wich other types of job should be highly paid?

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A group of p
oplulation
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populations
population
the population
think that famous entertainers are very well paid.
Therefore
, they believe
that is
 better that other sorts of jobs ought have a high salary.
H
owever I
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However, I
agree with the stars can earn a great amount of money, because we live in a capitalistic world where the market is regulated by customers. I feel that many people disagree with the a singer or a sports of high p
erfomance
a dramatic or musical entertainment
performance
wins big incomes, due to they think that the job that a famous can do is simple and do not have a great contribution to society. For
this
 reason, it is c
ommon
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commonly
t
ought
the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about
thought
taught
that other kinds of careers should receive a better salary which I think too.
For example
, teachers must have a better remuneration, since they are the base of the knowledge in a society.
On the other hand
, I consider that the famous stars do not have the blame of o
btain
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obtaining
enormous remunerations. In the case of Cristiano Ronaldo,
for instance
, he is paying for his job as a soccer player and for his work in publicity as well. So, his fans help that the Portuguese can be able to have that w
eatlh
the state of being rich and affluent; having a plentiful supply of material goods and money
wealth
Ergo, perhaps should be more unfair that celebrity’s bosses do not paid which they have to win. In conclusion, the discussion about w
heter
introduces two alternatives
whether
weather
water
is unfair that entertainers can achieve too much wealth always will be.
Nevertheless
, in my o
pinion
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opinion, this
this
 is a consequent of m
arket,
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the market
 which is b
e
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being
able to p
aid
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pay
for that t
alents
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talent
that is
 not the majority i
n
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of
the population, because f
or
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of
e
xamen
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examining
examine
a Messi or a Britney Spears can birth maybe each 40 years.

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