Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.

Some people argue that skills and creativity would
improving
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improve
by doing an enjoyable activity with
a
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an
off-spring
the immediate descendants of a person
offspring
, others claim that reading would
devlop
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
those abilities. I completely disagree with playing with children will
imorive
the skills and creativity.
Firstly
, more
relaxable
activities with
children good
Accept comma addition
children, good
for mental, activity as well as help to be
healty
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
whole day.
In other words
,
kids
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kids'
craziness activities and talking way makes people
to forget
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forget
the
tention
(psychology) a state of mental or emotional strain or suspense
tension
and stress, due to prevent from heart
diseses
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
diseases
disease
and the blood
presure
the force applied to a unit area of surface; measured in pascals (SI unit) or in dynes (cgs unit)
pressure
pressures
. It would not help to think
to
Suggestion
of
innovative ideas,
althuogh
even though, in spite of the fact that
although
reading helps to think in different way in any critical situations
.
Accept space
.
For example
, Billgartes,
who
objective case of "who" ("who" is also often used in the objective)
whom
the world
first
rishest
possessing material wealth
richest
man, said that, "his innovative ideas and new way of thinks has been improving by reading books and newspapers".
Thus
, reading is the gateway for facing
chellanges
take exception to
challenges
challengers
, and problem to survive the life. Another point to consider is that, reading books help to modify the language skills,
such
as
vocabluary
a listing of the words used in some enterprise
vocabulary
,
pronountaion
, and improve grammar.
Becasue
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Because
, books
are wrote
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are written
are writing
write
or translated by
authours
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the authors
authors
others
author
, who are good in their language.
Therefore
,
reader
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the reader
readers
could get more
benfits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
benefit
by reading new type of
similarity
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similar
words and grammars.
For Instance
, Harry Potter book, which is one of the world popular
book
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books
, makes people to read curious and help to improve English skills among all over the world.
However
, reading is most important
to
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for
all age
group
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groups
. To sum up, using leisure time with
kids
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the kids
help to improve the body health, but reading books help to
develp
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
the
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
and knowledge in all age
catagory
a collection of things sharing a common attribute
categories
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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