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People are either working till late night or migrating to a different place for the sake of job. Is this advantageous or disadvantageous. Give you opinion and explain why, with examples.

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Working late hours
everyday
Suggestion
every day
 or migrating to a different place to work has become a trend in
this
 modern era. In my opinion, it has more drawbacks than the advantages it can offer. We will see the reasons behind the disadvantages in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, working till late night and burning their night oil may help them with earning more and advancement in their career, but it will ensure that they will have less time for themselves let alone for their loved ones.
As a result
, there will be an emotional distance between them and the rest of the family.
For example
, in America, where people would rather spend their time working over the weekends and holidays, than being with their children or other family members, we often see that they have no close relationship among them.
Such
 behaviour is the major cause behind their children becoming drug addicts or falling into the hands of the wrong kind of people.
Secondly
,
although
, migrating to a different nation can be exciting at times, but it is not as easy as one might assume, due to several factors
such
 as language, culture and weather conditions.
For instance
, in my country India, many youths are immigrating to Canada, in search of better jobs and to have a better standard of living, but Canada is one of the coldest country in the world and it is very difficult to survive the winter there for a person who is used to the tropical climate of India. Its not just the climate, the cultural difference can be very difficult to adapt and can cause mental stress, which might push one into the state of depression. In conclusion, working late nights or migrating to a new place for jobs, may be very tempting and can offer self actualization in the beginning, but it definitely will have more disadvantageous in the long run,
therefore
 people should consider their health and family before anything else.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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