In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

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In the recent days
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,
shopping has become a leisure activity
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of
most of the individuals as it was a routine chore in the past. From my opinion it is
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open to doubt or debate
debatable
whether
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can be regarded to wholly positive trend as well as we have few negative development.
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statement to support
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of me or myself
my
views. For earlier generations consuming products or buying food involved visiting numerous shops as it was the same cost and each has the limited offer.Consumers
has
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have
less money and
credits
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credit
cards are widely available.
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,
nowadays shoppers can find everything they want in the shopping mall. There are
lot
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lots
of discounts on the products to purchase it. On one side, nowadays many persons are white collared workers as they do not have much time to spend with their family. Usually we an see enormous families in the shopping centre on weekends.
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instance one
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instance, one
can find
variety
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a variety
of goods and varieties
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as cafe and cinemas make spending money
enoyable
affording satisfaction or pleasure
enjoyable
.
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,
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is one of the
benefit
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benefits
as they are family together.
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, shopping has become a hobby to refresh themselves by spending time with their
oved
held dear
loved
ones.
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The downside
A downside
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,
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,
hobby
a married man; a woman's partner in marriage
hubby
is not a positive trend for most of the humans by purchasing products which is not required
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for
of
them.
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changes an attitude towards
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a juvenile between the onset of puberty and maturity
adolescents
over the world who spend much time in supermarkets.
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, by influence of advertisements people purchase those products which they do not need
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they get into debts.
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, shopping gives the negative hobby by wasting their money on unnecessary things. To sum up,
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shopping has become a leisure activity in the new
trend but
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trend, but
it is not
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necessarily
a positive development. As they have downside by using
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a plethora
plethora
of credit cards on unwanted things as they fall in debts.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • retail therapy
  • materialism
  • disposable income
  • economic growth
  • financial instability
  • environmental impact
  • social interaction
  • community building
  • emotional satisfaction
  • advertising influence
  • shopping habits
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