Today our lifestyle is changing rapidly and affects family relationship. Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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Some
people
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believe
that nowadays, our behaviour has changed and influencing a family relationship,
this
case would bring the advantages and disadvantages impact to the family. According to the research from the Republic of Indonesia in 2017, Technology brings various changes in society, one of them is the person's lifestyle. Today, most people cannot be apart from their gadget, especially from their
handphone
electro-acoustic transducer for converting electric signals into sounds; it is held over or inserted into the ear
headphones
, despite
this
thing has helped people to communicate easily,
however it
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however, it
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has also brought
also brings
is also bringing
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bring disadvantages things that related to the family relationship, sometimes when the family member
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is gathered
up and take some conversation, gadget can sometimes distract their quality time properly.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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