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Nowadays many colleges and universities are offering online courses for students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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In recent years, online
study
 has become increasingly popular among the students.
This
 following essay will discuss both
benefit
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benefits
 and drawbacks of
this
 issue.
To begin
 with,
this
 phenomenon is advantages to some extent.
First
 of all, online
study
 is very
covenient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
. Students
have not move
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have not moved
 to class and can
study
 at home. Studying an online course provides a flexible
time
. They are able self-allocation of
time
.
For example
, if they busy
anythings
an indefinite thing
anything
, they can change their
sudy
be a student; follow a course of study; be enrolled at an institute of learning
study
time
 or lesson just by notifying the teacher.
Secondly
, they can choose their favourite course. They are able to learn their desire course and subjects on their suitable
time
.
For example
, if they have any weak skills, they will register that skill.
This
 gives a great opportunity to broaden their
horizen
the line at which the sky and Earth appear to meet
horizons
horizon
 and consolidate knowledge.
However
, there are several main disadvantages of online
study
.
First
 and foremost, people
study
 online
tend
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tends
 to postpone their
time
 not suitable to finish homework. Studying an online requires high self-awareness.
Secondly
, students
not developt
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don't develop
not develop
aren't developing
not developed
 knowledge with other students, cannot make friends, event cannot compete with colleagues. Drawback of online learning would be that online students and professors have relatively low interaction levels, which may be an obstacle for students to fully comprehend the lessons.
Therefore
, students don’t have
chance
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a chance
the chance
 to discuss with
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 people or
activities
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activity
 groups. Vietnam students will remember quickly if they are allowed to participate in class activities.
Moreover
, not all people have
computer
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a computer
 or internet, if they have any problem with wifi or
computer
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computers
the computer
, their learn progress will be delayed. In conclusion, today online
study
 has been applied by a lot of school.
This
 tendency has brought about both positive and negative sides.
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