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• Some students found some subjects such as mathematics, philosophy are difficult, so these subjects should be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many leaner found that some subjects example, mathematics, and
philosophy
 which are too hard, so there subjects should be an option better than compulsory.Personally, I agree that not every student is interested in mathematics,
p
hilosophy
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philosophy, however
however
, those subjects are important in daily life.
This
 essay will illustrate individual perspectives throughout the following paragraphs. Most students are not interested in the same subjects it would be better. If leaners choose subjects that interest. It can effect in the long-term people can not stay with the things that they unlike for a long time. A clear example of
this
 is when I was in the secondary school, I do not have a chance to take the subject, so I have to study do mathematics while, I am not interested because it was very hard for me to deal with maths in that period of time.
Additionally
, I truly do not have any passion about
this
 course.
Moreover
, It leads to student why they do not want to go to the school.
On the other hand
, mathematics and
philosophy
 those subjects are very important in our life, people still need to learn about them. Undeniable that
This
 is the base on many things. Sometimes we cannot choose what we want to study. In my point of view, either university or school should have the individual time table of the study period. To make it clear think of drawing if you do not know about the measurement, how can you make the line. In conclusion, not every person is good at the same things,
however
, sometime we need to learn thing that we not interested. Mathematics,
philosophy
 or many more are the base of many things that can lead you or guide you to the success.
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