The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the world costs numerous government's expenditure. This money should be used in new cousing and road development .Do you agree and disagree ?

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It is irrefutable that in

this

fast growing world the

government

is focusing more on Innovation and infrastructure. A certain segment of the society

believe

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believes

that restoration of old buildings

cost

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costs

numerous

government

expenditure whereas

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expenditure, whereas

other reckons think that money should be used for new buildings and road development. I disagree with the statement and I would like to explicate my point of view in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, one and the foremost advantage of

old buildings restoration

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the older building restoration

old building restoration

older building restoration

old building's restoration

older buildings restoration

is that it is less expensive which require less labour and minimum time.

Another

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Other

major benefits of spending money on old building

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are

it reflect our art and cultural heritage

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that is

the reason why we are connected to our roots.

Moreover

, these buildings provide knowledge of

ancient period

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the ancient period

of time and

also

about our ancestors living Style

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From

this

, many

youngestors

a young person of either sex

youngsters

inspire from these old building's knowledge and they want to make their career in the field of

archaelogy

the branch of anthropology that studies prehistoric people and their cultures

archaeology

ecology

oncology

. Moving

further

, some buildings are associated with historical events.

For instance

, there are myriad famous buildings like

Taj Mahal

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the Taj Mahal

and Red Fort

etcetera

. These buildings are the pride of the country which generate the revenue for the nation. Apart from that many tourists around the globe visit every year in these buildings which boost the economy of the country. So

Accept space

that is

why

government

should contribute a large amount of fund to build these old buildings. To recapitulate, everything has its own value. So,

government

should spend money on old buildings in an appropriate way to save our historical identity and it is

also

important to have balance in everything

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We cannot ignore past for the future because these buildings

tells

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tell

us the real meaning of life.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

288 words

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The restoration of old buildings in major cities in the world costs numerous government's expenditure. This money should be used in new cousing and road development .Do you agree and disagree ?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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