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Some people believe that unpaid community services should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example working for a charity ,improving the neighborhood or teaching sport to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the fact there are several languages in
this
 word, but every year some languages just disappear and extinct. Some people believe in that its make communication more convenient and life will be easier,
although
 a group of people think it is a big deal and an effect on our culture and society. I agree with the
first
 group because of its help to us to increase our ability to socialize and interact with each other
also
 have a good effect on our
interact
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interest
 in policy.
First
 of all, communicate with other people from another country will be more convenient if there are a few languages
,
Accept space
,
 In fact that people don’t need to learn new vernacular languages till can connect or talk with a foreigner
for instance
, if someone from my country wants to travel to America, they must learn English language or take a translator
,
Accept space
,
also
 it
usefull
being of use or service
useful
 to close a contract between
two countries
Suggestion
the two countries
 because there are many idioms in languages.
Second
 , other people think that it can destroy culture and tradition in their country
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