Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Despite the modernization of beliefs in gender equality some people may argue women should compromise their careers to raise a kid. I strongly disagree

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the parents to raise their children and equal freedom of choice for

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the genders when it comes to their careers.

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essay we will discuss why is it wrong to only burden a

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with the responsibility of childcare. Modern women are having flourishing careers in all the sectors. Gender equality at work places is becoming a priority for employers. Because employers invest in female employees as much as in male employees and

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their expectations of returns are equal

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the genders. And most women have been giving results beyond expectations and

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in some cases a

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's performance at work exceeds levels of a

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's performance. Even though there is a change in mindset of people as some people are getting

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as women should focus on raising children and should compromise their careers in order to support the family. Not only is it unfair to women, but its

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a heavy loss to the society we live in, as it majorly affect the economies of the world. We may miss out on a lot of ground breaking work which may have come from the women who have the potential to bring those results. Earning bread by having a career and raising children

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full time jobs.

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the jobs require a lot of effort. Rather than leaving either of the jobs for either of the genders.

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genders should come in and contribute equally in

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the jobs by dividing the labour equally. Just the way a

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cannot miss out on the opportunity to have a successful career. A

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shouldn't be kept from having a life changing experience of seeing his child grow, as a

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have the desire to plant seeds of his own personality in his children. In conclusion, a

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needs to be given equal rights as a

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choose

what she wants to do with her future. And on either of the decisions of her a

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should support her. Because

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the women workforce

is as much a resource as workforce of men. For optimum utilisation of

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the

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resources, equality

shall be promoted. If men aren't great at childcare they need to improve that skill because a

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child

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their parents to have a happy childhood.