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Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say trees should be planted in the vacant area of cities and towns .while other believe housing facilities should be built instead. Do agree or disagree?

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Although
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 many people believe that green plants should be planted in cities and towns while others think about the building of new houses is necessary for humans. In
this
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 essay I will discuss about both the views and put my opinion at the end. To start with, it is necessary for individual
to plant
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planting
 green trees and plants around their environment. The fresh air as well as the good health is an extra advantage of
this
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 greenery.
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Moreover it
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Moreover, it
 provides
shades
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shade
 to the earth, which protect the humans and animals
form
a giver or sender
from
 excess heat.
In addition
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 to that, the plants
gives
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give
 extra benefit of scenery to eyes and helps to improve the mental as well as physical health of
person
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a person
the person
persons
people
.
On the contrary
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, if all the area is planted with trees the problem will arise with accommodation for the people who live in the cities. The shelter is one of the primary need of
person
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a person
the person
people
. So it is necessary to
built
Suggestion
build
 enough building for the people. To conclude my essay I would say it is recommended to plant trees and build enough accommodation which should be echo friendly. And the building should not
made
Suggestion
do
done
 harm to the natural habitat of any other species.
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